百度作业网我的这篇英语短文有错误吗?
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我的这篇英语短文有错误吗?
One day,Tim and Ben are going to shopping in the supermarket.They are looking at a man in the supermarket.Tim asks,"What is he taking?" "He is taking a bottle of juice."Ben says.Then,the man is waiting for a bus on the road.He is reading a newspaper.Tim and Ben are talking to a policewoman."That man is a theif!" "Really?" The policewoman is taking the man,they are going to the police station.Tim and Ben are very happy.
希望能为我指出错误并修改,
One day,Tim and Ben are going to shopping in the supermarket.They are looking at a man in the supermarket.Tim asks,"What is he taking?" "He is taking a bottle of juice."Ben says.Then,the man is waiting for a bus on the road.He is reading a newspaper.Tim and Ben are talking to a policewoman."That man is a theif!" "Really?" The policewoman is taking the man,they are going to the police station.Tim and Ben are very happy.
希望能为我指出错误并修改,
正在进行时用的太多了.如果是讲故事的话,用过去式比较好.现在时的话
One day,Tim and Ben are shoping in the supermarket.They see a man in the supermarket.Tim ask:" What is he taking?" "He is taking a bottle of juice." Ben says.Then,the man waits for a bus on the road while reading a newspaper.Tim and Ben tell a policeman that the man is a thief."Really?" The policeman takes the man to the police station.Tim and Ben are very happy.
我觉得过去式会比较好点.
One day,Tim and Ben are shoping in the supermarket.They see a man in the supermarket.Tim ask:" What is he taking?" "He is taking a bottle of juice." Ben says.Then,the man waits for a bus on the road while reading a newspaper.Tim and Ben tell a policeman that the man is a thief."Really?" The policeman takes the man to the police station.Tim and Ben are very happy.
我觉得过去式会比较好点.