老师您好，请您对我写的一篇英语作文的中间三段进行修改(也就是删除开头段和结尾段之后的段落),作文的要求是介绍一个你的同学

老师您好，请您对我写的一篇英语作文的中间三段进行修改(也就是删除开头段和结尾段之后的段落),作文的要求是介绍一个你的同学，并且内容段部分第一段是describe his life as a child(用过去时完成)，第二段是描述他现在的生活(用现在时)第三段是描述他将来的计划(用将来时)。请老师对我的语法进行批改并适当根据我的水平加一些例如名词性从句或者形容词性从句。谢谢老师,您辛苦了！
When Kevin was a child, he liked playing soccer and table tennis. During playing, not only he made many friends but also he learned that how to communicate with other and what is solidarity. After class, he always played with them and then finished homework together. At that time, he was very happy. Like most boys, he also liked car very much. To my surprised, when he was 12 years old, he was learning to drive. Although, it was illegal. Now, he is no longer a child and has 27 years old. He becomes more modest and realistic. He wants to improve his English, so he takes part in TIEP. As a student, he studies very hard and always finishes homework very conscientious. In his * time, he likes playing PS4 which is a game console. The reason is that when he playing game, he feels extremely relax. Except playing game, he likes cooking himself. He can cook many different food which is very famous local food in his country. However, he almost thinks that he cook’s food is not very delicious and he should do more practice. In the future, Kevin wants to get a good job which can get much money and great work environment. When he has earned enough money, he is going to buy a new house and car. The house which has two floors, and the car which brand is Nissan. After that, he will married his girlfriend and then builds a family. Finally, he will travel around word with his wife and child. The reason is that he wants to taste each country’s local food and learns different culture.
请老师对一篇高三英语作文的中间三段进行修改和补充，谢谢

解题思路： 主要不是一些语法错误，多多留意，要注意一个完整的句子里面只有一套主谓结构，所谓的完整的句子，指的是以句号结尾的句子，若有其他的主谓结构，你就要考虑是不是从句。
解题过程：
When Kevin was a child, he liked playing soccer and table tennis. During playing, not only did he make many friedns but also he learned how to communicate with others and what is solidarity. After class, he always played with them and then finished homework together.At that time, he was very happy. Like most boys, he also liked cars very much. To my surprise, when he was 12, he was learning to drive, though it was illegal.
Now, he is no longer a child and is 27 years old. He becomes more modest and realistic. He wants to improve his English, for which he takes part in TIEP. As a student, he studies very hard and always finishes homework on his own. In his spare time, he prefers to play PS4,a game console. The reason is that when he is playing, he feels extremely relaxed. In addition to games, he is also fond of cooking. He can cook different kinds of foods,which are all local specialties（特色）.However, he is still not satisfied with his cooking and thinks it needs improving.
In the future, Kevin wants to get a good job and make a large amount of money on the condition of good working conditions. After he has earned enough money, he is going to buy a swo-storey new house and a new car.Then, he will get married and start his own fammily. Finally, he will travel around the world with his wife and child and taste the food of different countries as well as learning their cultures.